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Writing: Revision Drill, Problem 1. Which of the following would be the best opening sentence for this essay?
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- 00:03
Here's an unshmoopy question you'll find on the exam...
- 00:07
If you previously... passed this passage... now would be a good time to hit pause and review...
- 00:14
Which of the following would be the BEST opening sentence for this essay?
- 00:18
And here are the potential answers:
- 00:20
Okay, so... assuming we've read the passage and already have the general gist...
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- 00:25
...we just need to go through the answer choices one by one and see what they've got to say
- 00:30
for themselves. A... "This is an essay about Franklin Delano
- 00:35
Roosevelt." Ugh. Boring. If that was the first sentence
- 00:37
we read of anything, it would also be the last. Pass.
- 00:41
B... "Franklin Delano Roosevelt was one of America's most popular, most inspiring,
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and most influential presidents." Ooh... maybe. It certainly seems to encompass
- 00:51
everything this passage is saying. We'll come back to it.
- 00:54
C... "FDR was a really great president who did a lot of really great things."
- 00:58
Um... just learning English much? Sounds like someone was out partying too late last night
- 01:04
and is trying to fake her way through an oral report. Next...
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D... "Franklin Delano Roosevelt was a president who inspired a lot of people, and that's why
- 01:13
I'm writing this paper about him." This sentence uses first-person, which is
- 01:17
a definite no-no. Unless you knew FDR personally, in which case... go for it.
- 01:24
B is looking like a sure bet. As in, "Buddies."
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