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Which of the following revisions could be made to support the author's claim in sentence 2?
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Okay sy reading shmoop furs We got a long passage
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here We're going to read as only rhetorical effectiveness and
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use of organization that's what they're testing you on here
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So the way i read these things that were going
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to skim the first sentence and then pick out key
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words sort of like this consumes really fast but i'm
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like she's very private lunch kind of scream they're they're
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Uh well if it's about fast food can they really
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there's a tonal thing here Like they're being a bit
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snarky And then what kind of cruise down the first
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sentence and excellent or now it's going down I'm going
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down by a customer each day and we kind of
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doing there's taani and kids are picky customers People are
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whining about kids food appetite stuff right Many parents and
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concerned about fast food nutrition way skim there any key
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words that stick out nutrition isn't nutritious repeated so that's
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a big red flashing light there when they repeat a
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word All right the next one too many tools news
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you're suffering budget cuts like proper funding one way to
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coming and taking revenue through school lunches that's where they're
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gonna profit off of student lunches All right well in
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the last paragraph In incorporating fast choices many love above
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All right so let's go to the first question right
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here in context which of the following revisions could be
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made to support the authors claim and sentenced to do
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no it's let's cruise They're sentenced to write their some
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fast food restaurants and high schools are forming partnerships at
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an alarming rate Okay so like mcdonald's and union high
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school what does that mean All right so what does
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that mean While the authors claim is the most important
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piece of an essay we love ourselves some fast food
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but what's even better than a burger and fries is
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a solid claim with support We were paid to say
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that art stating i gives large fries and a milkshake
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alright stating that high schools and fast food chains air
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forming partnerships quote at an alarming rate unquote is not
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on our authors claim menu stating that this is happening
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quote at an alarming rate unquote indicates the author isn't
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on board with this decision even though the rest of
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his paper indicates that he's supportive of it changing this
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to benefit students provides the right kind of claim for
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the support and evidence in the paper got it so
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change at an alarming rate which like he doesn't like
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the deal So to benefit students which says oh he
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does fast food and our schools they'll have a sleep
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coma across the country at around one o'clock All right
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so loser bowl here the ones we don't want one
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we reject well high schools aren't quite turning into mcdonald's
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yet so get rid of a Nor these changes happening
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in elementary schools to be there There's also no evidence
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in the passenger that suggests every fast food chain is
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jumping on this ship So get rid of seek So
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you have The answer is b way are
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