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Okay C t s spire er's We're nine of twelve

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making big progress here All right super rare It's in

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paragraph three Let's give to get down there The great

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wise apex predator top food chain if we pray seals

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line walruses great white sharks widely distributed lotion and temperate

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waters Their relative proximity to shore is what brings them

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into contact with humans Although encounters are super rare kind

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of like super bad fine movie I think meryl streep

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wasn all right well we're not looking for an obvious

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error here but we should recognize that the underlying portion

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represents a shift in the style of writing used throughout

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the passage While we may throw around the word super

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to mean very in everyday conversations you know yeah we

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do it all the time It doesn't actually fit in

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the context of kind of documentary style neutral journalistic key

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informative passage about great white sharks really is another one

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of those fluff words So is very really very Then

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it's just excessively fluffy and redundant repetitive saying the same

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thing over and over and over again Rare to the

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extreme Sounds like surfer dude speak maybe in south africa

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for a shark attack at just even more awkward and

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wordy And we're going to go with the upgraded version

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Thanks a lot Extremely rare So it should read their

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relative proximity to shores What brings them into contact with

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humans Although encounters are extremely rare can't towns all properly

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formal and extremely good Alright dude hanging ten

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