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CAHSEE 1.1 English Language Arts Passage Drill. Which line is an example of a metaphor?
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CAHSEE ELA 1.5 Writing Strategies 190 Views
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In this CAHSEE test question, figure out how to correct a section of the passage if any corrections are needed. CAHSEE ELA; Writing Strategies Drill 1, Problem 5
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Sorry And here's your shmoop du jour brought to you
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by santa claus Does that mean you're naughty or nice
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checking appalling past And so grandma get Remember hearing one
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fairy tales Thank you All right Which is the best
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way to revise sentence seven This one right here and
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here the potential answers clearly written Wears alright done Reading
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let's Go All right Good editing isn't just about fixing
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punctuation it's also about cutting out the unnecessary parts You
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know like that Like an infected appendix Some sentences have
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to go no matter how attached to them We are
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sorry all right Choice and see both make a noble
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effort to fix the awkwardness here but playing around with
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punctuation ain't going to do the trick We can sprinkle
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in semi colons commas or periods but at the end
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of the day we're still left with an awkward sentence
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that sounds too slangy for an essay And then we
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have choice be well there's Nothing technically wrong here no
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grammatical errors or anything like that Also by cutting out
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the word like and separating the sentence with a period
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this answer does make whole thing a little less awkward
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Even though option b gets a lot of points in
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our book it ultimately fails by committing the cardinal sin
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of redundancy repeating itself saying the same thing over and
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over and over and over again we never want our
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essays to repeat the same information as soon as readers
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get a whiff of redundancy Well that's when they stop
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reading and start messaging around on their smartphones and check
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out the new farmville three the revenge Both people play
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it Lovett choice d wins the day by being the
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only answer Brave enough to cut the second part of
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the sentence altogether There are no grammatical mistakes here and
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no redundancy Yes they still make sense and all is
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well looks like we've got ourselves a fairy tale ending
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the disney kind not the type where the kids were
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chopped up and put in a pie like a soylent
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green gray bold movie Ask your pain High card people
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