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Which is the best way to revise and combine sentences 1 and 2?
Where would the following sentence best be placed?
Which of the following is best to insert at the beginning of sentence 8?
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Where would the following sentence best be placed?
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Yeah All right T s I writing editor people Here
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we go Question number two in context Where would the
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following sentence best be placed All right so this one
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you've got to have skimmed the whole freak of the
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whole awesome letter here Let's go back and do this
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real quickly I mean from previously you said it was
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all this issue Quickly Overstate your worry Animal shelter mentoring
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the maintain good irritated business We're coming from pet owner
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All right so there she laid out her peev ignition
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that compared rafters I stated my email visiting north shortly
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and job My husband I went there and had dominated
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Hunter Hunter wasn't going good health for a reduction on
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me home We adopt him a one hundred million of
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it And kennel cough when we got home and coming
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to finally Okay ugly on paragraph two Sad for the
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dog Yeah I should really quit smoking All right paragraph
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three I called North Shore and Linda stands very upsetting
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him in there playing dogs illumination and overturned downstream bank
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statements till just two hundred fifty dollars missing value family
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resulting in any way Okay So clearly upset dog owner
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Well kind of camp lamer so my request was politely
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refused That's the sentence that has to get inserted somewhere
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And this whole thing is we'll just kind of sad
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like a human suffer That's one thing but well if
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your dog suffers so that's really bad So all right
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well who refused this big request that she had made
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more thinking We think it was the adoption counsellor at
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the Animal League with a kind of a polite refusal
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government bureaucratic vibe where he just didn't want to give
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her her money back This set of clues has toe
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logically occur after the writer's request for a refund but
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before she checks her not altered bank account well it
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really can't occur after sentence Three Because the author is
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trying to state the reasons that well it would be
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mutually beneficial to grant this request It also shouldn't be
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placed after Sentence six Because the writers request was to
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take the dog home not asking just for a refund
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yet unless she sends the corpus of guy stuff Hunters
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from and the phone call to the North Shore Animal
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League was not a request Like see what have you
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put it in there so it doesn't get a sentence
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about refusal after it So what's gotta be Be after
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sentence thirteen like way at the end here I assume
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that by explaining my dog's illness she would effectively overturn
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my adoption fee and then you would just stick in
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My request will play for you yet for that kind
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of clothes Pretty clean All right well here's to hoping 00:02:36.598 --> [endTime] the dog gets better quickly True
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