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All right see Writing shmoop er's Here we go It's

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Just dive into the question on this one We've already

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skimmed the who's this out of these paragraphs Alright Which

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sentence should be removed from paragraph three Because it provides

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extraneous information All right Wanna sentence ectomy here let's Go

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back to paragraph three Real quick hearing just in the

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puppy One two three There were no managing stress management

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with first place environmental factors So common triggers in their

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personal best person We're gonna job being funny Women morals

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understand women coming Negative effects Okay well let's think about

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this Extraneous information is sort of like swimming out in

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the deep end when everyone else playing nicely in the

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kiddie pool before all playing marco polo in the random

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showoff starts doing flips off The diving board of talent

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tends to be really irritating Yeah bob we're looking at

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you the sentence that irritates us even more than someone

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cannon balling our game is a little example of the

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guy at odds with his job Because it's taking funding

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away from kids we don't have anything against his morals

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We advise him to quit right away But we do

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Have an issue with inserting this tidbit of information where

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it really isn't necessary just doesn't conform with the tone

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the information being conveyed from the rest of the work

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So that's it it's sea since ten and the others

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just don't make sense He'll go through real quick We'll

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sentence seven a right there provides the topic sentence for

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paragraph three so it's definitely needed sentence Nine is unnecessary

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details sports topics in So we gotta have that thing

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in their way and the route incense eleven while the

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right there is the important clincher for the paragraph and

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can't come out because the transitions in paragraph four without

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splashing everyone else Now did everyone make sure you wait

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a half hour after eating before going in the pool

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that an old wives tale Or is that like a 00:01:46.304 --> [endTime] thing man

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