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ACT English 2.11 Passage Drill
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ACT English: Passage Drill 2, Problem 11. Which of the following sentences would make the most effective transition?

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In this ACT English passage drill determine if the writer of the passage may or may not have achieved their proposed goal.

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ACT English: Passage Drill Drill 3, Problem 2. What would the paragraph lose if the writer omits the underlined phrase?

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ACT English: Style Drill 2, Problem 3. How would you rephrase the sentence if at all?

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Here's your Shmoop du jour, brought to you by grandmothers. We all love them, mainly

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because they let us get away with murder.

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How would you rephrase the sentence below, if at all?

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For my birthday a new computer was given to me by my grandmother.

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When at all possible, it's best to avoid the passive voice. "Bill punched John in the face,"

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is better than "John was punched in the face by Bill."

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"Given to me by my grandmother" is a convoluted way to get across the necessary idea, so we'll

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nix choice (A).

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While we're at it, we'll cross out choice (B) as well, since it contains the same passive

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phrasing.

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Neither (C) nor (D) is passive.

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Both sentences are active, because they use "gave" instead of "given." However, (D) excludes

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important information by leaving out the fact that Grandma gave the computer as a birthday

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present.

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Therefore, we can kick (D) to the curb and crown (C) our winner. It's a dog-eat-dog-world,

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and we can't be passive if we want to conquer the ACT.

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